OOC: okay. Grammar. Please fix. I am not a rude person, but that was a bit painful to read.
An occasional misspell is okay, but we do have standards. Also, if you're going to denote other characters speaking, use names or abbreviations, different color schemes, bolding, italicizing, etcetera, but not caps. It makes it seem like it's shouting.
Next, don't critique choices made on academy. Some people prefer swords play to magic usage, that's a matter of personal preference.
Furthermore, your appearance. My world my rules, and ghosts are the spirits of once living things, and retain the appearance they had in life. Changing appearance would qualify as a power, however. Onto your choice of study.
The choices of study are the elements which were ALL mentioned, and anything pertaining to your species, such as Lilith's hemokinesis. There are almost no chameleons.
Also, your name can't just be a description of your character. Be unique and put a little effort into it.
Last, critiques on the rp are accepted, provided they can be understood. I've got no idea what you tried to say in that last post.
Remember, I choose who gets in the rp.
Whew boy.
S: she sees Tristam is not in control when he refuses, but doesn't fight the decision, instead nuzzling her head into his chest.
"Okay. I can wait, if it's for you."
She closes her eyes, happy to have him there, and her tail coils around his leg affectionately.
U: when she sees the mockery of Salamander, her friend who had actually visited her, her anger grows.
"HOW DARE YOU! YOU INSOLENT, ARROGANT LITTLE...... LITTLE BITCH!"
The once calm spirit had actually swore. Something she had never done before.
She raises her hand towards Salamander and her eyes flash blue.
"Challenging me near water was your final mistake!"
Water from the lake flows around them, cutting off any escape, physical or magical.
"DANCING AQUA SPEAR!"
At her command, water shoots out of the walls at the doll and Salamander mockery, forming spears of water.
An occasional misspell is okay, but we do have standards. Also, if you're going to denote other characters speaking, use names or abbreviations, different color schemes, bolding, italicizing, etcetera, but not caps. It makes it seem like it's shouting.
Next, don't critique choices made on academy. Some people prefer swords play to magic usage, that's a matter of personal preference.
Furthermore, your appearance. My world my rules, and ghosts are the spirits of once living things, and retain the appearance they had in life. Changing appearance would qualify as a power, however. Onto your choice of study.
The choices of study are the elements which were ALL mentioned, and anything pertaining to your species, such as Lilith's hemokinesis. There are almost no chameleons.
Also, your name can't just be a description of your character. Be unique and put a little effort into it.
Last, critiques on the rp are accepted, provided they can be understood. I've got no idea what you tried to say in that last post.
Remember, I choose who gets in the rp.
Whew boy.
S: she sees Tristam is not in control when he refuses, but doesn't fight the decision, instead nuzzling her head into his chest.
"Okay. I can wait, if it's for you."
She closes her eyes, happy to have him there, and her tail coils around his leg affectionately.
U: when she sees the mockery of Salamander, her friend who had actually visited her, her anger grows.
"HOW DARE YOU! YOU INSOLENT, ARROGANT LITTLE...... LITTLE BITCH!"
The once calm spirit had actually swore. Something she had never done before.
She raises her hand towards Salamander and her eyes flash blue.
"Challenging me near water was your final mistake!"
Water from the lake flows around them, cutting off any escape, physical or magical.
"DANCING AQUA SPEAR!"
At her command, water shoots out of the walls at the doll and Salamander mockery, forming spears of water.
